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2014 Rengay Contest Results (with Judges' comments)

2014

Rengay (Judges:  Beverley George and Ron C Moss)

 

 

The judging of this rengay was a great pleasure to participate in with Beverley. It was a very positive experience that brought many rewards. Right from the beginning we were in agreement with what makes a prize winning rengay. I would like to thank the organisers for the opportunity to be a part of this wonderful competition. (rm)

Imaginative linking and shifting; careful word choices; and harmonious collaborative writing in which no one voice dominates, are the hallmarks of the winning and highly commended rengay in this competition. In fairness to all contestants, Ron and I began our judging process by individually placing a comment by every entry and were delighted by how readily our shortlists merged into one. (bg)

 

First Place

Letter from Home

 

Susan Antolin, Walnut Creek, CA

Michael Sheffield, Kenwood, CA

Lois Scott, San Francisco, CA

 

the sound of the TV

bleeds into the kitchen clatter

summer dusk                            Susan

 

     among the crickets’ chirp

     cheek against soft earth      Michael

 

raccoons splashing

in the evening garden

star jasmine                              Lois

 

     after midnight

     a fumbling of keys by the front door

                                                 Susan

 

Fellini-esque

silent passage past my window

the moonlit ship                        Michael

 

     first light through trees

     footsteps in the hall             Lois

 

 

This rengay overlays elements of everyday domestic circumstance with a dream-like quality. The three voices blend seamlessly as the images link and progress, resulting in a poem of substance that seems longer than its structure dictates. (bg)

 

From the very first readings, this rengay appealed to me very much. A strong central theme flowed steadily, with many sub themes and strong images. The shifts and links were clever and captured the reader through the progression of evening to early morning. (rm)

 

Second Place

 

A Spill of Moonlight

 

Carol Judkins, Carlsbad, CA

David Terelinck, Pyrmont, NSW,  Australia

 

ocean fog

my dreams alive

in seaglass                                           Carol

 

     the maelstrom

     of Turner’s dark oils                      David

 

red sky—

drinking songs drift

from a tethered boat                            Carol

 

     second watch

     the deckhand baptized

     by a spill of moonlight                   David

 

the sound no sound

of buoy bells                                       Carol

 

     he calls my name—

     casting

     into the wind..                                David

    

 

The opening two verses set the scene for an amazing journey. I was carried along on a sea of colour, passion and power. The strong images were seamlessly joined in a vision of the sea that J. M. W. Turner would have applauded. (rm)

 

An economy of carefully selected words that engage the senses and enrich the reading experience, and an open-ended closing link, earned this rengay its place. (bg)

 

Third Place

 

Origami

 

Julie Warther, Dover, OH

Angela Terry, Lake Forest Park, WA

 

pumpkin spiced latte—

clouds swirl

a paper moon                                   Julie

 

origami passenger pigeons

just to remind us                              Angela

 

penciling in

the breath marks

Amazing Grace                                Julie

 

hand made books

trimmed with orange and brown

autumn rain                                      Angela

 

the wax seal on the envelope

unbroken                                           Julie

 

a house of cards

with tissue thin walls

other peoples’ lives                           Angela

 

 

With fresh and shifting images. this rengay generates warmth and a sense of enduring values,  as well as sensitivity to transience. (bg)

 

As finely crafted as handmade paper this rengay has many folds to explore and the end result was very satisfying with a strong closing verse. The feel of handmade books and paper is a satisfying one for me. Bookbinding informed my early years and this theme evoked many memories of those times with a sense of touch and smell. (rm)

 

Honorable Mention  (not ranked)

 

A Winter’s Tale

 

Michael Dylan Welch, Sammamish, WA

Sarah Welch, Sammamish, WA

 

morning light—

a trace of snow

on the neighbour’s crèche            Michael

 

     granddad steals a gumdrop

     from the gingerbread house    Sarah

 

crowded mall—

the eyes of carolers

all aglow                                       Michael

 

mistletoe hung

above the mantle—

empty stocking                             Sarah

 

     sale flags fluttering

     in the tree lot                           Michael

 

bronze sunset…

the first Christmas lights

turn on                                         Sarah

 

With lively imagery and pace, this rengay captures the warmth of Christmas, tempered by realism as in ‘sale flags’. (bg)

I felt all aglow after reading this fine Christmas rengay. I enjoyed the progression between granddad stealing a gumdrop to the final verse which links sunset with Christmas lights. (rm)

 

Visiting Hours

 

John Thompson, Santa Rosa, CA

Renée Owen, Sebastopol, CA

 

hospital silence

I linger to share

the moonrise                            John

 

       this sliver of hope

       things will be different     Renée       

 

talk of cancer

rippling in the carp pond

a broken moon                         John

 

       your ghost…

       or a motionless heron

       fishing in the gloom         Renée   

 

on a stone bench

stillness & shadow                  John

 

 

       waiting for you

       moonblind

       on the opposite shore       Renée    

 

A powerful theme that is handled with sensitivity, an acknowledgement of life and death, along with the flow of seasons and natural elements. (rm)

This is a love poem without once using the word; a journey through the twilight of terminal illness. The link between carp and heron creates tension and foreboding. (bg)

 

 

The Joy of Rain

 

Shrikaanth Krishnamurthy, United Kingdom

Sahana Shrikaanth, United Kingdom

 

autumn shower—

a grandma twirls

her umbrella                                            Shrikaanth

 

each drop on the leaf

reflects a rainbow                                   Sahana

 

monsoon camp…

slum kids painting in

shades of gray                                        Shrikaanth

 

splashing puddles

on the way from school

buffaloes                                                Sahana

 

drops plop plop plopping

on upturned milk pails                          Shrikaanth

 

pakoras

crackling in the pan—

thunderbolts                                          Sahana

  

Refreshing as a shower of rain, with unexpected images and word choices. An attention to sound. (bg)

A splish-splash of words and imagery fills the senses with this one, all in the safety of grandma’s twirling umbrella. The nurturing food brings it to a satisfying completion. (rm)

 

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